I HAVE QUESTIONS ABOUT MY SONG!!!!!

I_Luv_Her

I was bored so I wrote this song! I really like it and my friends like it too. But, I want to know what the world thinks. Such as, what to add or change. So please tell me what you think of the song. Here it goes:

Boy: I'm sitting here quietly,
Barely peering over my shoulder.
But, I notice you in the corner of my eye.
You look so beautiful,
Just sitting there,
So quietly,
Writing down everything that the teacher says.
Then your eyes start to rise from your paper.
So, I swiftly turn my head around.

Girl: I sit thinking about,
How my life would be with you.
Writing down my thoughts and feelings for you,
And just reminiscing on our times together.
But, as I look up from my writings,
Your eyes start to turn away.
So, what does that mean?
What are you trying to say to me?

B+G: All I want to know is how you feel,
I want to know how you feel about me.
And I just realizedthat if we got together ,now,
We would never have to wonder if we missed out on eachother.
I just want to want to look into your eyes,
And tell you that I love you so.
But I don't want to ruin what we have.
So, I just keep my voice low,
And pretend as if nothing is going on.

B:I just want to tell you,
Just let it all out.
But, when you're passing by,
Or just close by,
I can't seem to find the words that I was ready to speak.
My heart it skips a beat,
And I can't,
I can't tell left from right,
Or even up from down.
And I just lose all consciousness.

G: Everytime I see you,
From across the way,
Everything just seems to disappear,
No matter where I am,
Or who I'm with.
All I see is you,
Smiling and having a great time.
And I want to rush over to see you,
But, just the thought of talking to you,
Makes my heart sink like the Titanic,
All the way to my stomach.

(REPEAT B+G CHORUS STANZA)

B: Just the thought of not having you in my life,
Makes me lose my grip,
And the tears start streaming down my cheeks.
I just want to tell you,
That I can't even sleep at night,
Without the thought and image of you in my mind.
When you looko me in the eyes,
Your tenderness shows through to me,
And I feel as if I'm a king,
Just just riding in a chariot.

G: Oh, I want to see everything that's in front,
And out of my sight.
I see you loooking at me when I pass by,
But, I need to know,
If you're looking at me with love,
Or just looking at me because I'm in your way.
I want you to know,
That when it rains,
The water is my tears that have evaporated,
From when I filled my mind,
With the thought of losing you.

B+G: I really only have one last thing to say to you,
For we've been friends for many years,
And you have not shown me any signs,
You've showed me no signs of affection for me.
So, I want to look you in the eyes and let you know,
That even though I've decided to move on,
You'll always be at the top of my heart,
And I'll never forget you,
For you were my first true love.
But now I guess,
We'll never know,
If we missed out on eachother...

That's the end of my song! I also need a title, but I don't know what to call it. I have two ideas: "By The Way, I Love You" or "I Want You To Know". But I don't really like those. So, please help me think of a title.

chelseafc12 · rawwww Age: 15 Joined: 30 Nov 2007 Posts: 219

That is a really amazing song! i love this part of it, "But, just the thought of talking to you,
Makes my heart sink like the Titanic". That is seriously amazing. I really enjoyed reading that. For a title i don't really know. maybe "True Love". And yes i know that is a crap title but hey!

X.Blondie.X · Posted: Thu May 01, 2008 2:36 pm Post subject:

Cool song! And i thought u werent coming bk to the wrd chels? Meh!

alx · Posted: Fri May 02, 2008 4:51 pm Post subject:

chelseafc12 · rawwww Age: 15 Joined: 30 Nov 2007 Posts: 219

i wasnt!!!!! then i saw some classssss talent!