Fallen

*Mental* · Posted: Tue May 23, 2006 11:56 pm Post subject: Fallen

she can't sleep
she can't eat
so hard to think
when he's around
he hurt her so
she so upset
it's like someone just came around
and wripped her heart out
but there's nothing she can do
she can't tell anyone the truth
it's hard for her
to look in his eyes and not want to cry
her dreams are gone
she's afraid to show anyone
the truth
and she's falling
right out of the sky
there's nothing she can do
so she falls tonight
and she fall through the night

taz · Posted: Wed May 24, 2006 11:55 am Post subject:

Its good

*Mental* · Posted: Thu May 25, 2006 8:02 pm Post subject:

thanks!

Garnica456 · Posted: Thu May 25, 2006 8:51 pm Post subject:

that was really good

shijo · Posted: Thu May 25, 2006 10:47 pm Post subject:

good stuff mental Very Happy

your the best keep going i got like 800 poems and short storys now youll be really good

Alexander

darkangelgirl · Member Age: 17 Joined: 25 May 2006 Posts: 26 Location: USA

thats really cool

*Mental* · Posted: Thu Jun 01, 2006 6:24 am Post subject:

THanks!

shijo · Posted: Thu Jun 01, 2006 11:07 am Post subject:

it could be intuperted as you is it

Alexander

*Mental* · Posted: Wed Jun 28, 2006 7:35 pm Post subject:

In a way yes.

handwriter · Guest

the “truth” that you speak, in this poem, is it your secret? you once said, about the poem “My heart”:

"If you knew my secret then you would better understand."

a secret is a long weight to carry on your own, no?

*Mental* · Posted: Thu Jun 29, 2006 10:44 pm Post subject:

Yes, but it's complicated and I think that if you knew, if anybody knew, they'd look at me different,act different around me.It's embarrasing,and troubling and disturbing and honestly it's scary so scary that to even think about it I cringe and welll up inside and just want to cry.

handwriter · Guest

I think that it’s pretty normal to someone feel that about personal stuff. Of course some people feel that more than the others, that’s normal too.

I don’t know the nature of your secret, and it isn’t supposed to me to know, but you sure have someone to talk about it, some close friend, no?

I speak for my own experience that it’s great to write our feelings and fears, and it’s hard to trust that to someone, and that is painful to be betray, but keeping that sort of things to ourselves is self destroyable.

It’s great to let it all go. And you be mistreated you just have to say: “It's funny that you think I actually care!” =)

georgia girl · Posted: Sun Jul 09, 2006 6:24 pm Post subject:

well i think it rocks and ne 1 who says other wise isnt right in the head.

pepperjacksweetz · Rookie Age: 16 Joined: 12 Jul 2006 Posts: 8

that is good! Very Happy

bearwithme · Posted: Wed Jul 12, 2006 2:54 am Post subject:

Wow that was really good. I liked it! I think u should keep writing.. Wow. Great stuff. Sad but still great.